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172.70.134.176: /* Slam Poetry Rap */

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‎Slam Poetry Rap

2021-10-14T13:07:59Z

‎Slam Poetry Rap

2021-10-14T13:07:05Z

‎Slam Poetry Rap

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‎Slam Poetry Rap

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‎Slam Poetry Rap

2015-11-21T02:37:44Z

‎Slam Poetry versicle

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‎Verse 1

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 The girl whose inner world of words<br />
 Unfurls and whirls inside her brainpan<br />
-The man who stands and hammers out of a jam<br />
+The man who stands and hammers out a jam<br />
 His fix consists<br />
 Of eliciting licks<br />

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 One and all, just how it is<br />
 In schism<br />
-In the abyss<br />
+In the abysm<br />
 Of the mist

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 And mixing rhythmic tricks into a musical apocalypse<br />
 The child who sits with building bricks<br />
-He unpicks and affixes till
+He unpicks and affixes till<br />
 His vision sticks<br />
 His starfish mitts<br />

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 ===Slam Poetry Rap===
-The neighbours' human faces all eclipsed<br />
+The neighbours' faces all eclipsed<br />
-Amidst the mist, one cannot hope to glimpse<br />
+Amidst the mist, you cannot glimpse<br />
-The girl immersed in words
+The girl whose inner world of words<br />
-hurling into a literary world unfurling and purling before her as it percolates inside her brainpan,<br />
+Unfurls and whirls inside her brainpan<br />
-The man standing as he hammers out a jam at his piano<br />
+The man who stands and hammers out of a jam<br />
-His fix consists of eliciting licks with the flick of his wrist and mixing rhythmic tricks into a musical apocalypse<br />
+His fix consists<br />
-The child with building bricks<br />
+Of eliciting licks<br />
-He unpicks and affixes until his vision sticks, his starfish mitts twist in stout, determined fists:<br />
+With the flick of his wrist<br />
-All in schism within the abysm of the mist!
+And mixing rhythmic tricks into a musical apocalypse<br />
 ===Pre-Chorus 1===

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 The child with building bricks<br />
 He unpicks and affixes until his vision sticks, his starfish mitts twist in stout, determined fists:<br />
-Isolate, disparate, forsaken, in schism<br />
+All in schism within the abysm of the mist!
 ===Pre-Chorus 1===

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 The everpresent cloud of smoke, the mist<br />
 Rising from the coals, thrice-blest<br />
-Eclipses faces 'midst the gentle but unwavering effluence light:<br />
+Eclipses faces 'midst the gentle but unwavering effluence of light:<br />
 Stand aright!<br />

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 You can't see past the next two blocks<br />
 Your gaze is driven down<br />
 ===Slam Poetry Rap===
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 ===Verse 2===
 With heads bowed down to trace our steps<br />

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 Your gaze is driven down<br />
-'Cause you can't see the stars that shine in the sky<br />
+['Cause you can't see the stars that shine in the sky<br />
 The fog is way too dense<br />
 Can't see another person, wave hello<br />
-To try would make no sense
+To try would make no sense]
 ===Slam Poetry Rap===

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 Remember, Man, that dust thou art<br />
 A dying ember on the hearth<br />
 ===Chorus 2===

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 And as I stand before you now<br />
 I see your faces unconfused<br />
 ===Slam Poetry versicle===
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 Remember, Man, that dust thou art<br />
 A dying ember on the hearth<br />
 ===Chorus 2===